[Definitely better, though Dave's inexperience is still obvious. Not that Sollux is that experienced, but he has some clue of what he's doing, at least.
He lifts his hand, now, and cups the back of Dave's neck lightly, pressing him down a little to deepen the kiss. Opening his mouth, he licks out gently with his tongues, probing into that open mouth]
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He lifts his hand, now, and cups the back of Dave's neck lightly, pressing him down a little to deepen the kiss. Opening his mouth, he licks out gently with his tongues, probing into that open mouth]